Last year on Mondays we had fun with books. This year, we'll look at most of the same books but also some new ones, and see if the first line [or first paragraph] met the goal of a first line which is ==> to hook the reader's attention.
Here are some tips on writing a first line
https://www.masterclass.com/articles/tips-for-writing-the-opening-line-of-your-novel
Week 8 – The Martian by Andy Weir
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Martian_(Weir_novel)
First published: October 28, 2014
Here's what the story is about: Mark Watney is a botanist accompanying the crew of NASA’s Ares 3 to Mars for a one-month scientific mission. On Sol 6 (Martian day 6), a severe wind storm blows Watney out of sight and threatens to blow over the landing craft, which would strand the crew on Mars. The remaining crew leave Watney behind, believing him dead, before they can be stranded. But Watney survived and must learn how to stay alive while NASA figures out how to get him back to Earth. First line/paragraph:
I'm pretty much fucked.
That's my considered opinion.
Fucked.
Six days into what should be the greatest month of my life, and it's turned into a nightmare.
This story starts in first person POV and we already know a lot about this character. He has colorful language [2 f-bombs in the first 10 words!], but he's also educated [the phrase “considered opinion”], which makes him interesting. This was supposed to be the pinnacle of his life, but now he's in big trouble. The next few lines/paragraphs give an introduction of who he is, where he is, and why he's there. The story definitely starts “in media res”, then slips a little into backstory including the inciting incident which has already happened by the time the story starts. I definitely think this works at a first line/paragraph. I'm willing to follow this person for almost 400 pages and find out if/how he gets out of his predicament. Of course, so were millions of other readers since this book was also made into a movie.
Does this first line/paragraph hook your attention? If you had never heard of this story, would you buy this story in 2024? Knowing the story, would you change the first line? Tell us in the comments!
Actually, any story that has the f-bomb on page one, I put down. First line? Even worse. It's so common now. It's like "MC waking up to an alarm clock" bad.
ReplyDeleteI would absolutely read the book based on this opening. it's funny and intriguing. i want to know why he's f'd.
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