Second, two of the First 50 Critique entries we received by email last week were misdirected and finally forwarded to us by the person who accidentally received them [hi Michelle, and thanks!] We're not entirely sure how that happened, but we want to try to prevent that happening in the future. So, when you send us an entry by email, please be sure to open a brand new email and address it to our gmail account at OperationAwesome6. Click here for more info on contacting us. Also, the entry window will probably close on a Wednesday, and we will send a confirming email to everyone who enters. If you do NOT receive a confirming email by that following Friday, please contact us by Twitter DM and we'll track it down and/or give you an alternate email address to use.
We sent a confirming email last week to those of you who emailed us your First 50 Critique – MG. If you sent us an email and didn't receive our confirmation, please send us a Twitter DM.
Now on to the good stuff!
For all the details of how this works, click here. We are NOT accepting entries this week. But if you want to enter when we DO open the entry period, you must post a critique on at least TWO previous entries before your submission will be accepted for use on the blog.
Reminder: Be nice, but be honest. [Comments that are not polite/respectful will be deleted.] What would YOU like to know if this was YOUR first 50 words? Do you think it's a good opening line for the category/genre? Does it have a hook? Does it pull you into the story? Do you want to read more? Why or why not? Be specific, so your critique helps the person who wrote the entry.
Here's this week's middle grade entry from an awesome OA blog reader!
First 50 Words – MG Entry #2
Crouched down, quiet as a mouse, Octavia Bloom was holding her breath. The dust floating like glitter in the old attic was tickling her nose. Laughter bubbled up inside her, which she quickly suppressed by biting down on her lip. It wouldn’t do to make a noise and give away her position behind the old striped sofa.